Return Of The Female Knight - Chapter 5
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3 years ago
This series so far has the the problem of not lingering on a scene for long enough before moving on to the next. It always feels like we miss something and just transition before any actual payoff of the previous scene. It’s all just people doing stuff and then going to the next scene without any reactions to what just happened.
Part of what makes things like this interesting is seeing how the characters react in the situation, when you remove that it becomes more empty.
4 years ago
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